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MetalHunter |
A gorgeous story!
Jan 5 2011, 3:46 PM EST
| Post edited: Jan 10 2011, 2:09 PM EST
Tell me that I am a stupid, but only today I found your fanfiction. But, is gorgeous!As a critique, you did not understand that our overseas friends do not need intelligent Machines, but some cyber-zombies that malfunction. They also over-simplifies everything. It is something like "I feel! Cool! Come to SNU-SNU!" And of course, any real man/woman should hate the Machines and have mental problems! And where is your Shopping? And visits to a psychologist? And Where Is The Guns? This is very important! :D [SPOILERS: Instead, you turned Cameron into a classical heroine. A classic Italian heroine, who leads his (adoptive) people into battle, instead of her husband./SPOILERS] What I want to tell you is that your story is great and crushing for an European, but I do not think it will be successful for an American. It is the difference in culture. ;) Also, I'm in love with how you explain time travel and its effects. In fact, this is called temporal determinism or Novikov's principle ... ----- Ultimately, you are agreeing to debate here your story, or you want to remain spoiler-free? Do you find this valuable? |
I.Join |
1. RE: A gorgeous story!
Jan 5 2011, 6:01 PM EST
| Post edited: Jan 12 2011, 8:40 PM EST
EDIT:My fanfiction's main page is here (available in english or italian) This is the direct link to the first chapter of the translated (English) version of my fanfic. Well, first of all, thank you very much! I think you're the first in these (red+blue) wikis to have read it... I think many other are scared by my English. Has it been hard to read my translation? Let me know if something has to be corrected. About zombies, I think it is insane to think that Cameron was better cause the damage on the chip (that remembers me #5) I don't think original writers wanted to tell us about zombies-robots: what I loved in the show is the evolution of the AI, and many things happened as I had made them to happen! About overseas...every Country has its culture and its background, and some differences are minimal, some others are bigger... I know that story is not for all, but I mainly wrote it... for myself (then I translated to know what someone else thinks about it) I'm not understanding this: And where is your Shopping? And visits to a psychologist? And Where Is The Guns? This is very important! :D About spoilers, proceed in this way: (continue) Do you find this valuable? |
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2. RE: A gorgeous story!
Jan 5 2011, 6:01 PM EST
| Post edited: Jan 9 2011, 5:28 PM EST
--- SPOILERS (select to read) --- Heroine you say?! Well, first of all, she does what I think had been the best way to act in case John was dead. I already asked myself "what had they done if John was dead?" and the best answer was that! P.S. About Italian heroine... the unique Italian movie I remember is Nirvana, which is a cyberpunk noir (I don't suggest you to view it dubbed, use subs, its English dubbing is known to be horrible!) She is not an heroine, she has found the best way to save John, because she understood the Novikov self consistency principle. She moves in "an invisible silence", as a kind of "Keyser Söze" (which surely isn't an American name), for all the future to make all to happen in the same way without John, and mainly to save John, because she feels responsible of his death in her past. About the Novikov principle, actually Skynet in T2 being created by the chip is not a paradox if we assume that's not the same Skynet of T1 and that T1's Skynet had existed without the chip (so the abandoned software in the fanfic)! Do you find this valuable? |
t5000 |
3. RE: A gorgeous story!
Jan 6 2011, 2:42 AM EST
well you guys should post links to chapter 1 so others could check it out.to I join on your pages of each chapter add a link to page /chapter 1. otherwises someone who found page 12 would have to load 12 pages to get to chapter 1. Do you find this valuable? |
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4. RE: A gorgeous story!
Jan 6 2011, 9:45 AM EST
| Post edited: Jan 6 2011, 7:22 PM EST
"1. well you guys should post links to chapter 1 so others could check it out.1. Where? The link to the fanfic is in the Season3 page, in my profile, in the list by author (here and in the blue wiki) and I many times wrote in the forum that some theories were in my fanfic. Have I to post the link in other places? I checked where other people were posting their fanfics, and I also opened a thread in the fanfic category here and in the blue wiky when I published mine... 2. Good idea, I'll do. I hierarchically created the index inserting the pages in my fanfic > language > chapters on the left menu, so I thought that was sufficient (greasemonkey doesn't close that menu in that pages). I'll add the links (this night I'll again dream captcha symbols!) EDIT: I added an index at the top of each page (I'm becoming a captcha!) Do you find this valuable? |
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t5000 |
5. RE: A gorgeous story!
Jan 7 2011, 1:58 AM EST
"1. Where? The link to the fanfic is in the Season3 page, in my profile, in the list by author (here and in the blue wiki) and I many times wrote in the forum that some theories were in my fanfic.ok I just did a search for I join FF and got several pages.10 -14 my fault though as there is a link at top of this page, and I did not think to go to your profile page. later I did and then bookmarked the page with all the chapter links. that is the page to advertise in threads like this. so people can find it easily. I did read page 1 chapter 1 it was a long chapter and quite interesting and different. I did a few corrections to your english, and really your english is quite good. what I did was click easy edit and then start reading , then if something needed fixing, I just did it and when through reading saved the page. I liked the bunker they were sent to [sarah cam etc.] and the repairing of cams skin. also the idea for the transmitter in the turbines. Do you find this valuable? |
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6. RE: A gorgeous story!
Jan 7 2011, 3:57 PM EST
| Post edited: Jan 8 2011, 9:39 AM EST
"1. ok I just did a search for I join FF and got several pages...1. OK, sorry if it has been so complex. I added an index to the chapters on the top of each page, and I also added missing links on the bottom of few chapters. By now there is a link in my first post in this page 2. Good to know that it's "different"! 3. Thank you for your help! Other readers will be grateful to you too! EDIT: Applying back your corrections to the original file I found that a small part I had restored in Chap 1 hadn't been inserted back on these pages. See differences. --- SPOILERS --- 4. I love bunkers and closed places: surely I'm not claustrophobic. I inspired to T3's bunker, to the bunker in S1 and... to an abandoned WWI 2 levels bunker at ~90km from here I've been in few times many years ago... 5. "If a machine, a Terminator, can want to have a soul, maybe Sarah can too..." 6. Too much McGyver (and A-Team) when young left traces... Do you find this valuable? |
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7. RE: A gorgeous story!
Jan 12 2011, 8:17 PM EST
| Post edited: Jan 12 2011, 8:19 PM EST
Wow, someone just wrote a post asking me to translate the fanfic into english, so it seems many haven't understood thatI have already translated my fanfiction into English! Maybe it's not perfect, but it exists (and it's NOT the result of an automatic translation) You can easily access the translated (english) version on my fanfic by this direct link Sorry if I let someone think I hadn't translated my fanfic... Do you find this valuable? |
